Most of the people want to live in the United States. Why does a person leave their home country? There are many different reasons. Maybe to get a job, learn another language, live new experiences, join their family or maybe for love. Love is my reason.
I am new in America. I have been here for almost 5 months. I came from Blumenau Santa Catarina Brazil. Blumenau is a small city of Germanic colonization. The population is almost 300,000. Blumenau is famous for their Oktoberfest, it happiness for 17 days in October. It’s the second largest beer fest in the world. The first is in Germany.
Two years ago I met my husband in Blumenau, when he went to Rio de Janeiro to Carnaval. After that he returned to Brazil to be with me several times. But you know, long distance romances usually don’t work. So we decided to get married in the USA. Where? In Las Vegas the most popular place to get married in the USA.
Then I came to America and I arrived in Los Angeles. It’s a complete different life. Beginning with the language, more traffic, different traffic laws, large highways, longer distances between destinations. There are also too many fast food restaurants. Life here is fast. Everybody rushes and works a lot. The government is very complicated. There are many many taxes. The cost of living is very expensive. There is too much burocracy and many immigration documents.
Actually I am studying English because I want to be successful in this country and get a good career. It's a new challenge for me. The life in the United States isn’t like many people think. Most of the people want to live the American Dream, but they don’t really know how hard life is here.
Dear Pirata,
ReplyDeleteI will comment on your post this weekend. Now I am going to tell you about something that’s completely unrelated to this post. Why? I just wanted to send you this quick message, but I don’t have your email address. (If you would like to exchange email from time to time, please give me your email address.) Don’t tell your husband or any of the other students, but I’m falling in love with you — platonically, mind you. Why? You are almost the only student that comments on other students’ posts. And you don’t just comment; you do your best to give the students constructive criticism.
platonically
http://www.onelook.com/?w=platonically&ls=a
constructive criticism
http://www.wisegeek.com/what-is-constructive-criticism.htm
I put this on the Reading is Good blog (http://mimihuynh.blogspot.com/2009/01/successful-student.html):
Thank you very much for commenting on this post. There are some mistakes, but I don’t care. I don’t care because I think that the contents and the cohesiveness of your comments were quite good, and your grammar and vocabulary mistakes were quite minor.
Thanx,
Dan
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ReplyDeleteI agree with my teacher Dan about you.
ReplyDeleteand thank you for your feed back in my blog.
content:-
really i like your subject that could be considered a great love story about yourself, but i think you have a general thesis statement, and that was different from what you were talk about.
cohesiveness:-
i think fourth and fifth pragraphes have not any connection with your subject.because the first one was talk about Los Angeles, and other pragraphe was talk about your study in english with difficulty of life in united state.
and also you don't have conclusion paragraph.
content
ReplyDeleteBlumenau is famous for their Oktoberfest, it happiness for 17 days in October. I don't understand this sentence.
cohesiveness
I think 2nd pragraphe is not connection others pragraphe.
grammar
The life in the(don't use the) United States isn’t like many people think.
I think the title of this article may chang a little bit."Why i come here".In the article, you told about how to met your husband and why you want to come here.
ReplyDeleteBy the way, i like your article, Because i am the same situation with you. I really understand you.
content;
ReplyDeleteI like your article, especially the sentence "Love is my reason". It made me interested in your article.
I think you'd better say also the advantages living in U.S.A.. And I think that the conclusion is not enough.
cohesiveness;
I think it's good.
grammar;
I think you'd better say "Why do people leave their home country?" not "does a person", because you say "There are many different reasons" after the sentence.
I think in the sentence of "he returned to Brazil to be with me several times","several times" should be between "Brazil" and "to".