I was in the last semester of my acting school. I was very proud of it. It was my dream to be a famous actor.
When I was young I loved to go to the movies. My mother was a theatre actress. She was in several shows and I was always with her. She always told me that acting is a career with many sacrifices. But I wanted to be an actor.
Then I had lived my little home town to go to the big city to study at the best acting school. It was wonderful, one of my teachers was R. W. I loved attending his classes.
Sometimes after classes I took my books and went to the library to study. I couldn't imagine that I would meet Alice, my future wife.
She is a pretty girl and very smart too. She came from France."Bonjour, mom petit!" Alice said, that's how she would greet me. I loved it!!! I think French is a sweet and a romantic language.
As time passed the opportunities were coming more and more. One day in New York, another day in Chicago and I was always traveling. One of these times I was at the airport and I saw my favorite pop star actress arriving. This was an exciting and a special moment for me. When she arrived there were many paparazzis and people surrounding her. It was terrible for me. I stopped and thought about this scene and asked myself. Is this the life that I want? Without privacy, no peace of mine? The answer you know. I 'm having a cup of coffee in a complete anonymated. That is My Choice.
This is a good article.
ReplyDeleteI saw one wrong spelling in this sentence:"Then I had lived my little home town to go to the big city to study at the best acting school."
"Lived" changes to "Left"
Also, i think this sentence has wrong grammer. I think it may changes like this: "Then i had left my little home town to go to the best acting school in the big city for studying."
Content
ReplyDeleteIt's a movable aritcle, but I am wondering that what you really want to tell the audience?
Cohesiveness
The stucture lacks of compact structure.
Grammar and vocabulary
Good spelling.
Content:
ReplyDelete- I think you have a good title, oppose to your a thesis statement that you haven't.
- do you have a conculsion paragraph?
- in the last paragraph,"The answer you know" I think it's the worst sentence, because that mean- you don't need to read my post.
Cohesiveness:
- it's difficult to follow.
- What did you mean about" It was terrible for me. I stopped and thought about this scene and asked myself."???
Grammar and vocabulary:
- In the last paragraph" I was always traveling" I think you should be revised.
Thank you for your post
Thank you for sharing your story. That is wonderful story. But some grammar are high for follow. In the third paragraph that is not easy to understand (Then I had lived my little home.......acting school).
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